Lisa x) ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-11
Wow.. That is great!
I really loved it, it was so nice when he said sorry to God for stealing an angel.
Its a really sweet poem to show your love for someone.. Your flow was good and everything went well.. I really enjoyed reading it, I had a tear in my eye.. The girl in the poem is so lucky.
Well done on this its excellent.
x) 5/5
Jeremy
at 2005-11-11
Great poem! I love how the imagery at the beginning reflects how he feels.
Jez
Bill Turner ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-11
Amazing! Beautifully written. Well done. I am actually at a loss for words.
Angelina Taylor® ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-11
Awwwwww this is so sweet!!! I loved it! The idea of the angel was excellent. You've got such a sweet way with words. I especially liked this stanza
"He apologizes to God in his mind,
'Sorry God, I'm stealing an angel'
He can see Heaven in her eyes,
It takes away all his butterflies."
Sounds like someone's in looove :P If so, I'm happy for you! *hugs*
Taylor``
Dreams ( F C )
at 2005-11-12
You first stanza is great and it draws me right into it. You spread a beautiful and lovely feeling from this poem. It's very flow-y and the transition is so smooth I had to keep going. The structure is great and I envy how you can make every verse of the same length. This is one of my fave love poem. Really. =) I see no flaws. I've enjoyed it.
shadowlight ( C )
at 2005-11-17
Super poem. i really like it its so well written and worded beutifully. the feelings in it run deep, and well basicly its a brilliant poem
~..Luanne..~ ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-19
Such a beautiful love poem ...
The "He apologizes to God in his mind,
'Sorry God, I'm stealing an angel'
part was so incredibly sweet ...
The wording is wonderful and the flow as well ...
Truly a poem of love...
fAllEn ( F C D )
at 2005-11-19
Beautifully written Darien. You know what my usual act is- I pick out the one verse that means a lot to me and makes me think 'Oh my goodness, WOW!'. But i'm not going to do that with this piece as the entire poem had this beautiful, rhythmic flow that affected me in a weird and wonderful way. I too, thank heavens for the angels above, as they guard my one true love aswell (R.I.P Lewis). Thanks for reminding me that love is undying :).
Much Love and God bless,
FalLEn*-
Sarah ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-23
Amazing job. This poem has a great feel to it. It has good imagery in it.
cowgirlstar26 ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-25
Cute! 5/5 thx for r/c on my poem
Kayla ( F P C D )
at 2005-11-26
I just wanted to say thanks for all the comments...they mean more to me then anyone will ever know. You are a great writter and I envy you...Keep it up
XOXO Kayla
☆ButterflyStar☆ ( F C D )
at 2005-11-30
Awwwww ! This was soooooo sweet !
This is beautifully written, you're words are nice cos they suit the meaning of the poem really well.
5/5
xxx cici xxx
Amanda (Millie) ( F P C D )
at 2005-12-03
Awww that was superbly written. I loved it, deffinately a 5 in my eyes. You are a truly great poet with alot of talent. Keep it up :)
Naima ( F C D )
at 2005-12-05
Awww! Darien wow! Something's definitely going on w/u love???? hmmm... I guess i 'LL FIND OUT SOON ENOUGH
Simon Hayes ( F C D )
at 2005-12-09
A great write... Such perfect emotion mingled into passion ! Well written!
SONIA
at 2005-12-09
AW! how cute, i love this poem, its so sweet* Good work!
fireXfly17 ( F P C D )
at 2005-12-11
Wow this is one of the sweetest poems i have seen it's so cute and i love it you really good keep up the work you going on my fav;s 5.5
lisa ( F P C D )
at 2005-12-19
Aww, i loved it. you can tell that you really love this person!! keep up the excellent work.
**lisa**
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